[JJH85]

Originally Posted by ChristinaL80 (View Post) This may sound like an odd request, but is there anyone who wouldn't mind proofreading a new chapter of my Pacey and Joey fic? It's been over four years since I last updated and I lost contact with my beta. Any help would be appreciated. Here's the link to the fic: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/8938507...ing-the-Battle

I'm always there for some PJo fanfic,, so count me in. I just have to do something first and then I'll be right back to it.

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I'm not an accomplished writer, so I'm only going to proof for grammar and typos. I don't want to comment on content. I assume you are referring to Chapter 9 only and I don't believe I have read this fanfic before as I tend to stay away from the unfinished ones, so if there is any fact checking required, I would need more time to read the rest of it.

1.0 Paragraph 4 - You have holy tear and you should have holy terror when referring to Amy

2.0 Paragraph 5 - it should read we wouldn't have it any other way & you put haven't

3.0 Paragraph 11 - There is a well known phrase we use "to give as good as you got" not sure if you would prefer that to what you had at the end of that paragraph.

4.0 Paragraph 15 - You may want to take out the second "her" in the first sentence and then the last word should be say not day.

5.0 Paragraph 19 - would it read better if you put dimly lit living room

6.0 Paragraph 21 - he didn't know much about anything about the future at the particular moment - should the be that

7.0 Paragraph 28 - mauling should be mulling

8.0 Paragraph 48 - I think a couple of the sentences would flow better if they were joined with the next sentence and just use commas.

9.0 Paragraph 67 - you need an ed on the end of brighten

10.0 Paragraph 70 - It's should just be It

11.0 Paragraph 73 - you need a space between Itwas

12.0 Paragraph 77 - should the word be couldn't instead of could in the 2nd last sentence?

I hope I didn't lose track of the Paragraph numbers


13.0 Paragraph 110 - you need an "a" in this sentence -- he moved to New York for her without __ second thought

14.0 Paragraph 120 - I think you want to say Drue's eyes lit up

I love the Wall thing.

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by JJH85 (View Post) I'm always there for some PJo fanfic,, so count me in. I just have to do something first and then I'll be right back to it.

Okay, thanks, I can send you the new chapter tomorrow if you want. I want to write one more scene.

[JJH85]

Originally Posted by ChristinaL80 (View Post) Okay, thanks, I can send you the new chapter tomorrow if you want. I want to write one more scene.

I hope I didn't get too nit picky with my proofreading. And did my comments make sense?

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by JJH85 (View Post) I hope I didn't get too nit picky with my proofreading. And did my comments make sense?

Oh thank you so much, but I meant proofreading the new chapter I haven't posted yet, Chapter 10. I have it in a Word Document that I could send to you in an email.

I will still edit Chapter 9 with your suggestions.

[JJH85]

Originally Posted by ChristinaL80 (View Post) Oh thank you so much, but I meant proofreading the new chapter I haven't posted yet, Chapter 10. I have it in a Word Document that I could send to you in an email. I will still edit Chapter 9 with your suggestions.

I sent you my email via PM.

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by JJH85 (View Post) I sent you my email via PM.

Just sent it.

[JJH85]

Originally Posted by ChristinaL80 (View Post) Just sent it.

Ok I will have a look

[Capeside_girl]

Christina, I just started reading your fanfic. It's fantastic, l love it. I am on chapter 6 right now. Hope I can read more tonight when kids are in bed.

Thanks for sharing this with us.

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by Capeside_girl (View Post) Christina, I just started reading your fanfic. It's fantastic, l love it. I am on chapter 6 right now. Hope I can read more tonight when kids are in bed. Thanks for sharing this with us.

Thank you, so glad you are liking it!

I'm writing the last chapter now.

[JJH85]

And I got through a good portion of the chapter you sent me to proofread. So far no Notes on that.

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by JJH85 (View Post) And I got through a good portion of the chapter you sent me to proofread. So far no Notes on that.

Oh, good to know, thanks!

[JJH85]

Originally Posted by ChristinaL80 (View Post) Oh, good to know, thanks!

I'll try to finish up the proofread this weekend.

Did you ever get to read the fanfics I sent you?

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by JJH85 (View Post) I'll try to finish up the proofread this weekend. Did you ever get to read the fanfics I sent you?

Sounds good.

I read some, but hoping to get back to them soon.

[Capeside_girl]

Christina, I just finished your story. I absolutely love it!!!
Will you post Chapter 10 soon on fanfiction.net? Can't wait to read more

[ChristinaL80]

Originally Posted by Capeside_girl (View Post) Christina, I just finished your story. I absolutely love it!!! Will you post Chapter 10 soon on fanfiction.net? Can't wait to read more

So happy that you enjoyed it!

Hopefully I'll post the last chapters soon. I'm still writing Chapter 11, but have gotten distracted.