Klaymen

Hello,
I am a big fan of twilight. (Actually I am difficult to get rid of my obsession)
Twilight from Edward perspective was something I wanted from the reading the first book. And the draft of midnight sun was amazing. I just couldn't except Stephanie is not going to finish it.
So, I just had to try to right it myself. I just finished the first chapter. please consider I have no experiment in writing and that English is not my first language.
I wanted to show it to someone, to know if it is worth something.
here's the end of the first chapter, when Edward is asking Bella a million question: https://drive.google.com/file/d/0By6...ew?usp=sharing
I will be happy to hear comments, maybe something you wrote, and cool idea to get that better. I had the feeling some of the parts I haven't done well enough.
Still hoping Stephanie will decide to work on it again. There is nothing I want in the world more then that book written.
Shachar.